Monday, 4 May 2015

Living Life to the Fullest in High-School Leads to Your Death in University

I still remember the last day in school, where everyone was happy and excited for ending their first stage on life; high school. I was there, sitting in the middle of the class, in a big circle with my classmates, each minute, someone jumps kiddingly acting as another person between us, imagining her in future. A friend of mine looked at me, and said “hey girls, oh, wait a minute, (apparently answers a phone call and looks away): hey, oh! A Chanel event? Of course, I’ll be there, thanks for the invitation though.” –she repeated the act, with a different brands’ names, “Prada? Oh sure, I’ll come. Cartier? No worries.” –she looked at us again and said, “Sorry girls, how are you doing? You’ve been missed.” Everyone in class started to laugh, and suggested that she means me. I was laughing hard, how come that she knows me so well?

My high school was great, living life to the fullest. Education? Yes! I studied in a good international school, I graduated with a score of 90%. My biggest fear at that time was the university that I wanted to complete my studies in. Everyone else suggested that the fashion career fits me the best, and I started to see myself as a fashion designer. In between these visions, I saw a gap, and a feel of depress awaken me up. In the same day, I gathered with my best friends, who were not in the same class of mine. We decided that we want to stay together, at least, at that time; and at that day, we chose to join the Academic Bridge Programming. My father was against this choice, he told me that the ABP does nothing to the person and that it is an absolute waste of time, but I stood in my position until I convinced him.

When I joined the ABP, my first thought during the orientation days was to have fun with my friends, so I did not take it seriously; I was arriving classes late, and I did not do my work as I had to, especially, for my Academic Composition and Literature classes. The biggest reason was that the classes’ levels were beyond my English knowledge and understandings, which means that if I wanted to succeed on them, I had to suffer. Two weeks later, I realized that if I did not start to change myself, I will not have a well-shaped curve in my life; and from that point, I saw myself learning.

I blamed my primary and secondary high school English teachers, I blamed them a lot. I still remember my struggles and tries to understand The Lumber Room short story by Saki. Saki is a British writer who writes a really, really deep short stories in both words and ideas. And for me, who barely knows the basics of English, I spent exactly 5 hours to get what in and in-between the lines of three pages of it. Whereas for writing, I worried about the contents of the essays. In high school, all that matters was the number of words, thus, when my Composition class's instructor told us that we must not care about the number of words, but to think about the text and most precisely, the purpose of the paper, I gave up. I then ended up going to the English room to ensure my literature class's understanding and Composition class's articles, where I found a great help in there. I kept struggling that whole year keeping in mind that the more I work at that meantime, the less I will have to suffer in future.

In the ABP, I understood what the real physics is. My English skills improved and I got more confident while speaking the language. I realized that physics is interesting and so, I knew what major to choose. Until now, whenever I think of my major, I remember my hesitation and my classmates’ visualizations. I thought for a while that all of what high-school did was literally wasting the students’ time. It did not really give me a good English, nor helped me decide for my future. I believe that there are a lot of students that go through these thinking fights, exactly as me. And I am mostly afraid of the chance that they might take the wrong path on life, following what people they trust suggests, instead of trying to figure out their interests, which is, exactly as what my cousin did, spending 2 years and a half on a major that she does not want to continue the rest of her life in. So now, as we are asked to do a research paper, I decided to grab the chance and satisfy my curiosity in knowing how the high-school and ABP teachers think of their teachings, why they teach that way, and do they really prepare students to find their creativity and interests?

Methodology

To find out the answers I am seeking for, I had to make interviews to teachers from both the communities. All of them had been interviewed with the exact same questions that lead to the answers I wanted without asking that questions directly. And to be fair, I carefully picked the advanced-studies high school teachers who are in the same level of the Academic English and Physics ABP’s instructors. I recorded the interviews I made with my ABP’s instructors, but took notes and wrote the most interesting sentences I heard from my high school teachers, and this was done because of the school rules. However, the answers I heard from my ABP teachers were exactly as I expected, but the case is totally different with my high school teachers.

Discussion and Results:

When I think of myself as an Engineer student, I repeatedly choose to first discuss the physics part of the interviews. I went to the school, and blew a question that required some time to catch the interesting facts from my teachers’ answers. "How do you teach your students? In other words, what strategies do you follow?" I asked.

Physics

High School

I heard a brief but long answer from my teacher, Mrs. Menni. And while she was speaking, she said a sentence that attracted my attention since it is similar yet different from what my ABP's professor said, Dr. Sami. "We want to teach them in a way that improves their thinking, but some students are actually too lazy to think, so they just apply the rules to get points and pass the class." she answered. Mrs. Menni, in the other hand, taught me from that interview that the classes' sections chosen in high school makes a difference on the way of teaching too. The fact that two advanced physics students receive two different teaching strategies surprised me all the way until her point was finished. Unfortunately, my section, called the Engineering, was the one that should learn an advanced physics, but in a way that does not really necessitate the thinking part. We were taught and asked to 80% plug the rules, and to 20% think. While another section, called the IB, had to 50% deal with the questions by thinking.

After the teaching, comes the grading, and so, I asked my teacher whether they care more about the students' knowledge and learning, or their use of rules and calculations, and I was confident from the answer I was about to hear. "Every teacher has a different opinion, and to me, I do care more about the learning. However, we all have to grade students according to their calculations. If a student had a wrong final answer, she is going to be subtracted, and this is because the grading depends on the government rules." Mrs. Menni said. My expectations fooled me.

ABP

Dr. Sami is the only physics teacher in the ABP, and so, I interviewed him with the same questions. “I teach my students in a way that show their thinking. I ask questions that are related to real life, and I want them to know the strategies that lead to the solutions." He stopped for a moment, then continued, "I honestly do not care whether that student is going to pass or fail. Once he put an effort and start learning, he will certainly be rescued. I can therefore help him with the grading. A student who plugs the rules without showing me his way of thinking, can barely get C with me.” I strongly agree with what he said, since I tried him. And this time, my expectations took the right path.

English

High School

Mrs. Shazia, is an Advanced English teacher, who is really ambitious in teaching. While interviewing her, she showed me the different techniques she uses for teaching, she obviously stated that the English teaching changed in a better way these two years.

“Not every teacher between the 8 of us, as you can see, has the same way of teaching, however, we follow the rules given to us from the government. For Writing, we have to check the spelling along with caring to the length of the essay written, so if it is very short and doesn't fulfill the criteria, then we deduct marks. And we do consider the grammar specifically when it effects the cohesion or structure of the sentence.”

She talked about everything, and a short interview with barely 2 questions had took more than 15 minutes from us. The time was flying and what really caught my attention from all what she said, were that not every teacher puts the same effort(I agree, I strongly do) and that the government, again, specify the grading forms, which rely on the importance of the words counts and spelling and grammar checking the most.

I was amused, and the answers I heard were like a ball of shockness thrown at my face. I thought for a while that, if perhaps all the teachers were teaching the same way Mrs. Shazia does, then I might not be in that helpless situation in the ABP. Or if the government did not straightly give those rules, then the other teachers might not feel lazy to teach the students the way they had to.

When I asked about literature, my teachers’ answers were short and summarized. A short story is given to the students in the exam and they are supposed to answer the questions followed. I still remember how straight forward most of them were, to the point that I sometimes used to not read the stories or articles, but the questions and then search for similar sentence to find the answer next to it. All that matters at that time, was the understanding of the general ideas of the stories. That is why, when I went to the ABP, I was wondering about the unfamiliar phrases I heard, such as the exposition, climax, metaphor, and so much other terms.

ABP

In the ABP, I made interviews with two English teachers who both conversely taught me both Composition and Literature. Mr. Robert Marcacci, who I liked his literature classes more than the composition ones, since he uses a sarcastic way of teaching on it which I find unique, had taught me a lot about literature, starting from how to use the literal devices, how to find them or figure their importance in the sentences, and how to respond to or comment on them. Mrs. I also learned a lot from Mr. Nancy Lovelace, my Composition class’s instructor, whose strategies made me feel more confident in writing. This, nonetheless, does not mean that I did not get advantages from them in the other way around, because I really do appreciate the effort they had put for teaching me and my other classmates in both the subjects.

Literature

Mr. Bob, however, said that he likes teaching students that way not only to be different, but to allow them give and take with each other. He, in fact, likes the class to be active and does not really grade the students according to their answers only, but by showing how they think critically and by making connections to the story.

"Literature is not a writing class, therefore, I do not wait from my students to rewrite or summarize the story to me, what I expect from them is to make connections from their life, if possible, to the text; and to look for metaphors or contexts from that story. So in other words, a story about a rabbit and a turtle that are racing each other, and the slowest animal wins the race; those are actually stories about us, so we can apply these stories to our lives. In fact, I usually do not mark my students wrong for being wrong as long as there is a logical approach and evidence from the text. This, in fact, will help in improving their negotiating skills and benefits them for their future, which is the goal I am aiming for."

Composition

Mrs. Nancy tend to give reading assignments which in the same time is either an important piece that the students must respond to, or a sample that shows how the structure of the next piece should be; and this idea, had personally helped me a lot as a beginner student writer that was not sure how the layout of each piece have to be. Even though what she do helps a lot, but she is not the type of teachers who gives everything straight forward, in oppose, she tries to make her students become more and more independent. An A grade is not an easy to get with her.

"I show my students “this is what is wrong”. Or I get to where I just take a line of type and I just put a checkmark out there, which means that somewhere along there, there is a mistake, and they have to find it and correct it. This step, as I think of it, makes them aware of their individual errors, and that they need to be responsible for the final product.”

When I was an ABP student, I first took the composition class with Mrs. Nancy and Literature with Mr. Bob, and in the second semester, the teachers were switched. I know that I was blessed to be in that academic teachers order, because Mr. Bob, as a writer teacher, does not tell us how to do the structure of the papers, but leave us to do everything by ourselves to up-stretch our independency. As for physics, I am really grateful that I took it, since it guided me to the major I belong to.
After the answers I heard from both Physics and English high school teachers, I really do not know who to blame. The government who restricted their rules, that it my opinion, does not help the students that much, or the school’s administration who did not come up with good-enough, or perhaps, practiced-enough teachers? Regarding this, I in fact am thankful to all my teachers for the background they gave me about their subjects, and I am and will always carry even the tiny details I learned from them.

In the end of this piece, I really want to thank all the instructors who approved to make the interviews with me. And a special thanks to Mrs. Shazia who did not only do the interview, but also gave me a sample that shows the strategy she follows for teaching.




Table1: Overall Comparison between Different Studying Strategies
Literature
 
Mr. Robert Marcacci (%)
Mrs. Nancy Lovelace (%)
High School Teachers (%)
How Effective it was (Students’ Confidence about Learning)
80
90
55
Participation in Class (In Total/All Students)
95
75
50
Composition
How Effective it was (Students’ Confidence about Learning)
95
85
55
Participation in Class (In Total/All Students)
70
80
45
Physics
 
Dr. Sami
High School Teachers (%)
How Effective it was (Students’ Confidence about Learning –by Thinking)
70
20
Participation and Concentration in Class (In Total/All Students)
70
45
#Each Box is meant to be Per 100%.        

Sunday, 3 May 2015

In the Middle of My Thinking Universe


The little details keep mysteriously hidden until someone brings them up. I realized this after a question that was thrown randomly to me by my Composition class’s professor. She simply asked, expecting a direct and quick answer. This answer, frankly, has taken hours to cross my mind. To me, I see it as a simple yet complicated thing! Perhaps this is not the case with everyone, but the thing is, I did not feel myself continuously falling into those things except when I had heard the lively question that leads to them. This reminded me of the feelings of Donald M. Murray, a sophisticated writer who was surprised by the results he got after being interviewed by Carol Berkenkotter: “I realize how eccentric my work habits appear. I am aware of how fortunate I am to be able to work with my wife”(233). However, I think of my writing process more as a ritual than a habit. So, “What are your writing rituals?” my professor had asked.

As I drink my cup of coffee, or more accurately, feel its presence next to me while listening to a light soft music, the answer is being ensured to me. I wondered when and how these things stuck to me with writing, and I discovered that the Academic Bridge Programming played a big part of it. As a very, very beginner writer, I tried to escape from writing without admitting it to myself, to avoid the feeling of guilt. It was when my previous Composition class’s teacher first assigned us to write an article, a response paper, which was new to me. I went to Starbucks, ordered a coffee, and opened my laptop. I kept staring at the screen while listening to music to get into my own world far away from the outside noise. I started to type some words whose accuracy I do not actually remember, but from that point, I never left my coffee and headphones. Along with that, I now notice that I do play with my lips, which is a meaningless weird habit whenever I stop for a while, thinking of the sequence or phrasing of the next to-be-told sentence.

Prior to that, and while planning or brainstorming the ideas, I always walk. No matter where I am, at home or university, I keep endlessly walking until everything is settled and apparently done in my mind. I weirdly react with my thoughts, and I sometimes face problems with others because of my unbalanced expressions. Once my friend came to me hiding her laughs as she told me about her cousin who was saddened from me. I asked her about the reason, and she said that I saw her cousin, stumbling almost going to fall, and kept obviously smiling while looking down, nearly laughing at her; then my expressions changed and I frowned and bit my lips while looking away. They did not know that I was smiling to the idea I finally got for my next blog post, then got confused of how the opening of it would be; I did not even see or recognize her cousin in the middle of my thinking universe.

While writing, I keep anxiously looking away from the screen whenever my thoughts get mixed. I write, delete, and then write again endlessly. A single short paragraph can sometimes take me more than 30 minutes. I now notice, while keeping in mind that I want to know more about my doings as I write, that I get out of my own control even though I try to keep an eye on my actions; in other words, I realize them later. For the next writing assignment I receive, I am going to record the process, because I am certainly sure that I will know more about myself as a writer and will probably be just as surprised from the results as Donald Murray was.

What are the Rhetorical Situations Constituents Within the Commercials


 
            In his article titled “Rhetorical Situations and Their Constituents”, Keith Grant-Davie explained in details what does rhetorical situation means in both writing and real life, he was also precise while describing its four elements which are: exigence, rhetor, audience, and constraints. He began to introduce the idea of these elements, or in another word, constituents, after preparing the reader with the definition of rhetorical situation, which really matters since knowing them make us aware of the commercials goals and help us in visualizing the commercials too. Therefore, while trying to make some sense of the definitions of these elements by giving examples, I will consider 3 commercials and briefly observe each of the four constituents of rhetorical situations in each of them. Avacado from Mexico would be my first example, then comes the Doritos When Pigs Fly’s ad, and will end it up with Cartier Winter Tale’s.

            To be prepared, I will consider Grant-Davie’s definition of the elements mentioned above. He posted Lloyd Bitzer’s definition of the exigence and added two questions that, in his opinion, would address the exigence more accurately, “what the discourse is about, why it is needed, and what it should accomplish.”(Rhetorical Situations and Their Constituents, 106) And according to Grant-Davie, the rhetors are the ones who are responsible for the discourse, he included that “Well-known actors or athletes may lend the ethos they have established through their work, while unknown actors may play the roles of corporate representatives or even audience members offering testimony in support of the product.” (Rhetorical Situations and Their Constituents, page 109) Thus, we can understand his way of differentiating between both the audiences and rhetors. Whereas the constraints, in my opinion, is the most controlling element in the rhetorical situation. He had also quoted Bitzer’s definition for this block, who defines it as “persons, events, objects, and relations which are part of the situation because they have the power to constrain decision and action needed to modify the exigence.” (Rhetorical Situations and Their Constituents, page 111) Knowing these terms and what they mean is important for us in both writing and real life, because they help in predicting what and how will the audiences reply or react to us. Thus, as writers or speakers who consider these terms, we will put ourselves in the readers or audiences shoe and do our best by presenting strong and enough evidences that will convince them to be in our sides, or make them understand our positions. And this is exactly what happens in commercials.

Figure 1: In the discourse                                       
 
 
 
 





 
 
Figure 2: When Mexico’s choice was out

 
 
 
 
 




 

            It is obvious that the exigence in my first example would be the informing part by the old man who plays the role of the speaker in the discourse, to tell what each state or country had picked for herself, and smoothly lead for Mexico’s choice of avocado. The rhetor of the avocado’s commercial would be the old man who is rolling the discourse, while the audiences are the other three American men who were giving comments after he declares each country’s pick (see figure 2). We can notice from his smile (see figure 1), that he supports this specific choose. And from his pause from speaking (from 0:44 until 0:46), that he wants the inner audiences to be excited to know what did Mexico select. These expressions, of course, do not show up unless we are completely agreeing with something; and therefore, this is a sign that prepares the outer audiences to the main point that is meant to be transported to them. Lastly, the constraint was the avocado, since choosing it for Mexico had clearly delighted the audiences inside the commercial; their reactions toward this pick differed from the picks that were previously mentioned, such as the sloth and the dodo bird. One of them had stated “that makes the avocado of Mexico the ideal snack”, and this can show what the company of the commercial wants to deliver to us as outside audiences. This ad, nonetheless, used humor to persuade the watchers and attract them to the product. And because ads are being ignored these days, the company created something out of standing, by making it before 4 billion years, and used wide imagination on it to tie the avocado with Mexico, instead of directly go for their purpose. Of course, we know that they also tried link the concepts of both logos and ethos to this commercial, to make it more successful, by making the old man declares in a funny way what had been decided by the presidents and higher members to each state.
 
Figure 3: The boy asking for Doritos Chips












Figure 4: The boy planning to get it

 
 
 
 
 





Figure 5: “When The Pig Flies” moment  


  










Figure 6: The boy getting the chips



 
           




 

            The boy’s craving for Doritos chips and his tries to have some from the old guy, would be the exigence of the second ad. We know that the little boy is the rhetor, since he is the one who took a step forward to solve his problem of wanting the chips, while the older man is the audience, because he had, kind of, pushed him to make the plan of making the pig flies. This little boy wants to deliver for his audience that he really is serious when he asked for the fries, and that he would do whatever he can in order to get it. The constraints for this commercial were the pig and the rocket, as without them the little boy will not have the chance to have some chips. By letting the boy makes a plan to achieve something impossible to get some Doritos, the company of this commercial exaggerates the yumminess of, and the craving that the boy has for, this fries. And by doing so, they make the outer audiences excited to taste something like this product. This commercial used humor to deliver their message too, and used an outstanding idea of making a plan for the sake of chips. Humor is always a good choice to go for when it comes for ads, because we, as outsider audiences, usually mute our televisions in films breaks, unless these ads deserve our time. However, when it comes to Doritos ads, you can call me a fan. Why? Simply because I like their use of humor in most of the time. 

Figure 7: Cheetahs throwing Christmas gifts        
 
 
 
 
 





Figure 8: People received it                
 












            While going further for Cartier’s commercial, the exigence would be the problem of the boxes that slide from the sky to Paris city because of the cheetahs. And the rhetors are the cheetahs, in addition to someone who did not show in the ad itself, yet his name was presented in the background song, who is Santa. Whereas the audiences within the commercial were not directly presented too, these audiences are Paris citizens. A good example would be the house owner who did not show in the ad, yet the Christmas tree and the gifts that were there inside his/her house, and the Cartier box that had fallen there to him/her (see figure 8), indicate that he is meant to be one of the audiences. The rhetors in this commercial apparently want to bring happiness for the audiences by gifting them, and to point out that Santa is really there for good people. I would say that Cartier’s commercial has the most powerful constraint among those three ads, because they cleverly used Santa but presented him as the small tigers –which represents Cartier, in the same time; because they were the ones that pushed the boxes to the edge of the skies (see figure 7). We know that Santa can control the percentage of success of the commercial because he is popular and a source of joy for the children, who will have fun watching this cute ad, which might lead for letting the parents or any other elder notice the ad too. Although this ad is somewhat mysterious when finding the rhetorical situation blocks, but it is fascinating and clearly attracts children and ladies the most, since it is soft and delightful. And as usual for ladies: when it comes for jewelries and soft music, it is always touching too; therefore, we can notice that the use of ethos in this ad differs than the previous two which used humor instead.

            It is nice to recognize that we can learn from these commercials and notice how they interact with each other in spite of their differences. In other words, even though they came from different companies and advertise different things, but they all follow the same strategy and consider the exact same elements to achieve their goal of attracting people to their products. It is also noticeable that each one differ in a way. For example, Cartier’s commercial has invisible audiences who were not shown in person. Doritos When Pigs Fly ad has a single audiences, leading to the understanding that it is not necessary have to have a bunch of audiences as what was shown in Avocado in Mexico and Cartier’s ads. These commercials, nonetheless, enlarged the good qualities of the products in a good way, and delivered the message they wanted, that is, to let us notice their products, by nicely promoting to them.



Works Cited
 
Avocados From Mexico – #FirstDraftEver Commercial. YouTube. Avocados from Mexico, 1 Feb. 2015. Web. 01 Mar. 2015.

Cartier - Winter Tale. Youtube. Cartier, 17 Nov. 2014. Web. 1 Mar. 2015.
Grant-Davie, Keith. "Rhetorical Situations and Their Constituents." Writing about Writing: A College Reader. Eds. Elizabeth A. Wardle and Doug Downs. Boston: Bedford/St. Martins, 2011. 101-16. Print.
 
When Pigs Fly - Doritos Crash the Super Bowl 2015 WINNER OFFICAL. Perf. Nelson Talbot. Youtube. Nelson Talbot, 9 Nov. 2014. Web. 1 Mar. 2015.
 
 

My Composition Class in TAMUQ


This video explains what I went through in one of my English classes in TAMUQ, with a professor who taught me a lot.

After all what happened, I still appreciate her effort in teaching me and the other students, and I am thankful to every moment she spent irrigating our writing talent.


Why Margaret Kantz’s Article Matters to Us as Students


            Margaret Kantz explained in her article titled “Helping Students Use Textual Sources Persuasively” how most of the students react toward the articles they read, and what ideas related to writing about what they read do they have. She deeply illuminated the fact that students do not write what they are required to as sophisticated writers, but instead, they write what they believe will pleasure their teachers, which is agreeing with other popular writers. She gave a hint for improving the writing skills by thinking of Kinneavy‘s triangular diagram of the rhetorical situation (corners: writer/speaker, audience, and reality/topic) (75). Kantz mentioned examples of undergraduate students who were told to write a research paper with different sources showing how each person’s strategy varied from the other (72).

Shirley is one of the examples used in Kantz article. She is described as an intelligent student who values education and is good in writing and telling stories, but surprisingly got a C- grade in her assignment. Kantz, however, talked about the reasons that caused Shirley to get this mark and showed the solutions from Alice’s point of view (70-71). The biggest problem, according to Kantz, was that students like Shirley were taught to summarize and find the purpose of the essay at the first place instead of expressing their wonders about it. They did not realize yet that they must write to freely build arguments after evaluating and analyzing what they read. In fact, they do not look to the researches as claims, but as accurate facts that they cannot discuss.

Kantz stated in her article “She also needs strategies for analyzing her reading that allow her to build original arguments.” (74) After reading this statement I posed for seconds and connected it to “The Role of Inquiry in Writing a Researched Argument” by Stuart Greene. I found the two articles similar in a way where the both of them discussed the researched arguments. Kantz focused on how to build the argument, while Greene quoted a passage that explains how discussions start before you come and continue after you leave (11).

After reading this article, I woke up to many things that I did not recognize on myself before. I admit that I used to be a “Shirley” before moments. I had read the beginning of this article twice, because I was not paying enough attention to what I am reading in the first time. In other words, I did not take gaps to question myself why and how is it related to me, but after doing so, I found that the article is appealing since it contains a lot of significant strategies and ideas that change the reader’s mind toward reading and writing assignments. I really recommend every student to read it.


The Purpose of this Blog and the Reason for its Name

Hi everyone!

This blog is being made for the university sake (just being honest.)
In this blog, you are going to see some articles related to studying, and more specifically, about writing. For the moment, I am going to post a digital narrative, and some essays. Not sure whether I will ever come back to post on this blog, but I might do so.

In between the articles I am going to post, you will see more than once and notice me stating the fact that the Writing About Writing Textbook changed me as a writer and person! I hope to find out in the next days/years that other students are taking advantages from it as well.

You might wonder why I chose this name for the blog, however, you would see a bitter fact yet sweet one in most of my essays! Moreover, the bitter also refers to the fact that I am mostly sad for this class to end, since it taught me a lot of things. Yet, as any other student, I am so happy for the course to end and for the vacation to approach us *YAY!* :)
Have fun navigating my blog!